WATERMELON MMMMMMMM
Mmmm looks so taste just can't wait to have some Mia brought the watermelon around with a trey i got some 3,2,1 i took a bit juicy so juicy. Then mana took a bit of the green bite of the watermelon mana said it tastes like cucumber. Rakai eat his watermelon he eat the hole thing delicious let's have another one wait until morning tea the teacher said yay seconds the watermelon was as crunchy as a chocolate biscuit it was so juicy the white pips were as soft as a leaf.
Thursday, April 11, 2019
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Cool poem Son, I can’t wait for summer watermelons again!
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Deletethank you mum and dad thank you for commenting
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ReplyDeleteI like how you are descriptive in your writing it is really great and it is also great how you took it and compared it to something else that is familiar and how you experienced it.
I know that you got the tray of watermelon and that you really like it.
I learnt that you are really descriptive and really good at writing.
I think you should improve on your spelling and make sure it makes sense because some of your grammar is not good and that you need to improve on specific things like adjectives and conjunctions.
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